*bangs head on desk*

Dear self:

What is wrong with you?  You're six and a half pages in from 'words aren't the only way', and the only clothing you've managed to get the characters to remove are gloves, bracers, and Tifa's shoes.  windrider1  asked for Cloud taking his time, but this seems a bit extravagant.  Get a move on!

Frustrated,

Yourself

P.S. We're leaving in an hour to pick Sae up from the airport, so I'm not kidding.  Hurry up!

...I think my problem is that I picture things happening in a very clear fashion in my head, and I don't want the reader to envision it differently.  So -- as a for instance -- if I have Cloud crouch down, and then a few sentences later Tifa slips into his lap, then I have to write description explaining that he is no longer crouching, or risk the reader thinking he's crouching with her in his lap, which would be weird.  Makes me wonder if I'm doing too much telling and not enough showing, though.  Maybe I'm being too thorough with my descriptions?

(Maybe Sae will beta for me when she gets here????)

Also, as a side note, it's possible that sex makes Cloud pessimistic.  (O.o)  Quoted from the game script:

Before nookie:  Whether they are or not, we still have to do what we can. And believe in ourselves...

After nookie:  This is probably the last time we'll have together...

Bad translation, or has all the optimism left his system?  You decide!