I should, as a fellow ficcer, say I notice those things all the time, and I do, but I don't. If the grammatical errors are staggering, yes, I'll be frothing at the mouth, or if they are used in narrative that is non-POV specific, I'm irritated at mistakes. However, in GOOD writing and storytelling the grammar rules take a backseat to character. So, you have to ask yourself, how would Cloud say that? You're writing HIS POV and unless I missed something, you aren't there. So, would your character think: She was wearing the same clothing she'd worn the night previous; or would he think: she was wearing that same brain imploding scrap of sexy cloth from the night before. ??

Preposition be damned.

/ranty opinion